Last week I shared the opening of my novel, Reckless Rescue. Since that post, I’ve passed the novel to my sister to read through for me, and she had a different view on where the opening should be. So today I thought I’d share her take on the beginning.
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“I’m not p-p-pregnant,” she managed to get out, before bursting into tears.
Nelor held her while she sobbed uncontrollably, patting her back. “It’ll be OK Marlee,” he said in an attempt at comfort. “Maybe next month…” His words sounded hollow, possibly because he had been saying the same thing for eighteen months now.
The first few times, Marlee had stayed optimistic, parroting words about it taking time to get pregnant, ignoring the fact that he wasn’t her first partner, or her first attempt, but her hopes were slim now.
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Would love to hear what you think. Does this beginning draw you in more than last weeks? I’m still undecided.
Great six! I know where that pain comes from because I’ve lived it. I read last week’s excerpt and this. I’m all for jumping right into the moment, but for this scene I think I’d need a little bit of a lead up before being hit with the emotional impact. IMHO
Well, I haven’t read last week’s, but I think I kinda like starting in the middle of the emotional mess like this. Thanks for sharing!
Hmm, one reply either way. Will have to think on it more I guess. Thanks for the replies.